Each journey of life is unique. Each path is original. Each destination has it’s own value. Each person to travel the journey is an individual. We may all begin our journey the same, but as we grow we all choose different methods of transportation. The method of transportation we take decides the experience as we are traveling. The choices we make reflect upon flow of our ride, whether it is smooth or rough.
Hi info1547 welcome to the forum
You haven’t provided much context to allow for a critique of much value, but I’ll put in my 2 cents.
To me, the overall tone feels metaphorical and the use of the word “transportation” seems incongruous. i.e. The paragraph as a whole is two metaphors in one, the second half more “material” than the first half.
For me, the shift causes a subconscious interruption in the flow making the reading less than it could be otherwise.
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