Help with site recommendation

Hi I offered to write a recommendation for a friend’s website. I am not a great writer and hope that you would be willing to read this over and suggest things that would make it better.

Working with Bill earlier at FairFlight Multimedia, and then again starting in 1999 at Ictus, I was able to experience Bill’s greatest qualities; Creative, Results Driven, Listening and Understanding Market, Sales, HR needs, Team Management and providing clients superb Account Management.

Bill has lasted in this Industry, because of his integrity and the strong and valuable connection he builds with suppliers, co-workers, and customers. The ability to establish strong customer relationships has allowed Bill to broaden sales opportunities and establish ‘prized’ recurring revenue. At Ictus we witnessed Bill grow accounts that not only benefited Ictus long-term but also provided ongoing value and financial rewards for his clients.

Creativeness should not be overlooked. Although Bill can Manage his companies standard products and services, he is also creative enough and has the ‘field experience’ to guide great choices and new ideas that lead customers to growth opportunities for their business.

I strongly recommend you give Bill a call and let him help you today!

Thank you!
Steve

@ServerStorm ;I would change it to read as follows:

Bill and I first worked together at FairFlight Multimedia and then again, beginning in 1999, at Ictus. Through out our association, I witnessed the strong qualities Bill brings to the superb Account Management he provides to his customers. He is creative and results-driven with superior listening skills and an acute understanding of marketing, sales, human relations, and team management. His ability to establish strong customer relationships has allowed Bill to broaden sales opportunities and established enviable recurring revenue. At Ictus, Bill grew accounts that not only yielded long-term benefits for the company, but also accrued on-going value and financial rewards for his customers.

Although Bill capably manages his company’s standard products and services, his creativity cannot be overlooked. His ingenuity is backed by field experience that consistently leads his customers to great choices and new ideas that deliver growth opportunities for their businesses.

I strongly recommend you give Bill a call and let him help you today!

@Shyflower ; Thank you so much it reads much better. I wish I could see the process that you used to make this so much better, but alas I lack the tools to do more than just understand that it is better!

Regards, and thanks for your expert skills shining through!

Steve

You’re welcome. I hope it helps your friend. :slight_smile:

(Wouldn’t you know it though – I found an error. “throughout” is one word, not two. :rolleyes: